Monthly Archives: November 2012

revised scene: gravel boats

This is one of my favorite scenes in the book. It didn’t require too much cleanup in this pass. Not like the following scene (the raid on the PK detention facility in Nan Garde Hait, which was a MESS despite … Continue reading

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revised scene: Mike meets the Dogs

I got a really late start (around 3:30pm), but in just 3.5 hours I had a pretty good editing session. Deleted 1k words, wrote 1k new words, revised 2.5k words. I had a few goals in the revision of the … Continue reading

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new scene : Atlanta Hackspace

A few people told me that the sub plot with the hackerspace kids should stretch over more than one scene. I’ve re-outlined the second book, and stretching some of the minor plots a bit does two things: makes the pacing … Continue reading

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revised scene: planning Doolittle’s Raid (v2.0)

I think I may have blogged this scene again. I worked it over a bit more today, as part of 6,000 words of revision. == 26 aug 2064: Northern Logistics offices, Aristillus, Lunar Nearside Mike looked at General Dewitt closely. … Continue reading

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new scene : 40,000 space suits

As you may or may not recall, draft three is trying to accomplish three things: rearranging scenes so that the book keeps all of the balls in the air filling in plot holes that opened up when draft 2 was … Continue reading

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new scene: the Dogs during the PK assault

Dogs – dozens of them – pressed close around Blue, Max, and Duncan. In privacy, with no humans present, they felt free to sniff the three returning travellers. Several others, at the perimeter, howled at the news of Rex’s death. … Continue reading

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